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#1 CheddarJack

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Posted 24 March 2011 - 02:41 PM

For all of you who have read my other RO stories, thank you. It is nice to know that others like reading what i write. Now since the forums are back up i can finally post my latest work. It is entitled Dragon Slayer. This story will be in two parts (since this first one was 11 pages). I have not started on part 2 yet but you can read part one here:

http://cj-ragnarok-s...s.blogspot.com/

Let me know what you guys think either here on the forums or on my blog. Whether you have something good or you have criticisms, i will be accepting them all. This time around i partnered up with a friend of mine. So i wan2 give her credit. She was a big help in making this probably my best one yet.

I would also like to announce that hopefully within the next month or two I will begin writing an RO Series. Think of it like a manga, but just words and story. The story will be all our own creation as will the character, but the settings will most likely take place in places that are very familier to most players. It will be a weekly or monthly chapter by chapter thing and i will be working with my friend again on it. We will also be trying to do it in an odd style and see how that turns out. Be prepaired for character designs to come out soon http://forums.warppo...tyle_emoticons/default/happy.gif.
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#2 CheddarJack

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Posted 25 March 2011 - 06:35 AM

For those of you who read it, what do you think?
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Posted 25 March 2011 - 09:53 AM

You should keep pictures.. You know.. like a story book o:
Ragnarok's main thing that draws people are its unique manga/anime like style graphics.
If you can post maybe some small pics etc. It woul help.
Cause one thing is to read a book, and another is to read a book online.
Online you get tired of just reading words, so a picture will kinda give a break from reading.
If you see people who post in RO story, they tend to post pics of their tales.
And it's awesome.
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Posted 25 March 2011 - 10:13 AM

Well tbh i cant draw. I also cant use sprite editors and the story that i talk about is more made up than real RO. Like skills are a lot cooler sounding than they actually are in my stories. Also with the castle i changed the layout to fit my needs. If you were to actually go into the castle i think if you follow the floor plan in my story it leads you to the dungeon and the castle kitchen. There arnt enough people or NPC's that could let me show you guys what im talking about.

The people on ROStory seem to be just telling stories of stuff that happens in game. I making something up that cant really be done in game.

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Posted 26 March 2011 - 12:45 PM

any other comments?
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Posted 26 March 2011 - 01:50 PM

It looks long and it doesn't capture the readers attention. I would suggest to put pictures or screenshots in between or something.
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Posted 26 March 2011 - 02:53 PM

Its a story of course its long. Do you expect it to be a paragraph? It doesnt take that long to read, geez. please see my previous comment about pictures.
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Posted 29 March 2011 - 08:36 PM

bump...also thinking about pictures for w/e i do next.
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Posted 29 March 2011 - 08:42 PM

i suggest you do this to grab attention

divide the currect story into a few parts(so it doesnt look so long)
at the end of each part put a link "read next part" which redirects to the next page

this will make the story look shorter and grab more ppl's attention

PS:Usually ppl seeing huge stories in page r ZOMG ITS SO BIG(thats wat she said),if its boring its a waste of time...
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Posted 29 March 2011 - 08:49 PM

i suggest you do this to grab attention

divide the currect story into a few parts(so it doesnt look so long)
at the end of each part put a link "read next part" which redirects to the next page

this will make the story look shorter and grab more ppl's attention

PS:Usually ppl seeing huge stories in page r ZOMG ITS SO BIG(thats wat she said),if its boring its a waste of time...


Hmmm thats not a bad idea. Whenever i start on part 2 i might do that. Also the series that im waiting to write on might be like this too (though i doubt each chapter will be anywhere near this long).
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Posted 30 March 2011 - 08:08 AM

You should keep pictures.. You know.. like a story book o:
Ragnarok's main thing that draws people are its unique manga/anime like style graphics.
If you can post maybe some small pics etc. It woul help.
Cause one thing is to read a book, and another is to read a book online.
Online you get tired of just reading words, so a picture will kinda give a break from reading.
If you see people who post in RO story, they tend to post pics of their tales.
And it's awesome.

Nice Sig.
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Posted 30 March 2011 - 08:39 AM

IMO i dont care if its too long if your intention span is that small where your like zoom to large cant read then -_- off XD. Also i think its good CJ but you forgot the best warlock ME! JK i mean i come from playing -_- like DnD and what not so using your mind to make a picture is way better then seeing it.
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Posted 31 March 2011 - 06:23 AM

Also i think its good CJ but you forgot the best warlock ME! JK i mean i come from playing -_- like DnD and what not so using your mind to make a picture is way better then seeing it.


Thanks vivi. I mean if i can find an artist (sprite artist most likely) who could help me i dont mind adding in some kind of picture in there, but i dont have access to someone like that. If I could do it myself i would, but I dont have the time or the knowledge to do it well.
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Posted 31 March 2011 - 09:07 AM

Yea its hard but worth it.
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Posted 31 March 2011 - 08:20 PM

Yea its hard but worth it.


If you know someone willing to help me out let me know.
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Posted 01 April 2011 - 05:46 PM

Still looking for artists btw, just thought i mention it http://forums.warppo...tyle_emoticons/default/happy.gif
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Posted 21 April 2011 - 07:19 AM

Well i finally found an Artist to maybe help quench the thirst of thoughs ppl would cant focus without pictures. I had her test make something to see what she could do and it was way better then i thought it would be. Her picture is of the scene where Silver is fighting the Acidus. Though he only faught one she made a picture of him fighiting the multiple in west prontera.

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