The ones in this post are gathered before the Friday 6/24 maint so if anything was changed after that, my apology.
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- Quest - To El Dicastes (pt.1)
- Quest - Inspector Doha/Cat-ear Man (pt.1)
- General - Manuk (pt.1)
- General - Manuk (pt.2 / final)
- Quest - To El Dicastes (pt.2 / final)
- General - El Dicastes (pt.1)
- General - El Dicastes (pt.2 / final)
- Quest - Inspector Doha/Cat-ear Man (pt.2)
- Quest - Inspector Doha/Cat-ear Man (pt.3 / final)
- Quest - Civil Services
Quest - To El Dicastes
Spoiler
Bad: delegation
Good: delegate
This is throughout the entire part of the quest when Vyhannus is being addressed.
Spoiler
1 - The first and second line seem to have missing punctuation.
2 - The way that dialog words sound weird to me, but maybe it's just me.
3 - So it's like this? :v
4 - The second sentence sounds funny with the usage of "first", but I don't know, maybe it's just me again.
5 - Missing punctuation.
6 - "El Dicastes, the capital of Sapha" with the subtitle is being repeated constantly within quest dialogues. It gets pretty annoying after that whole phrase was mentioned for the 4th time.
Spoiler
Maybe I missed a tone or something but why was Vyhannus questioned? Captain's name also got changed to "Hiba Agiff" in the quest window in the back.
Spoiler
Maybe these two dialog boxes can merge into one? Splitting them out like that is kinda weird, especially when the second window starts with a cap when it's supposed to be one sentence.
"_Character's name_, I invite you to El Dicastes, our capital city."
Maybe "Ravail of the Sapha/Safas race"?
Quest - Inspector Doha/Cat-ear Man
Spoiler
It will probably sound more natural if the choices are reword a bit?
Spoiler
1 - Run-on.
2 - "As you already know, the expedition here is an alliance of 3 countries, and we're not all on good terms." (Changes underlined.)
3 - A bit of a run-on. Maybe changing to "But the important thing is which country was behind this? Why would they do such a thing when we must promote peace and cooperation?" will be better?
4 - Cat Hand merchants?
5 - Missing quotation marks and capitalization for the quote.
6 - "............................Of course. Different tastes should be respected."
7 - Second sentence sounds weird.
8 - Missing punctuation.
9 - Missing punctuation in second sentence, second "please" sounding redundant.
To be honest, all of Doha's dialogues should be looked through in general. I'm not sure how to describe it but it sounds kinda flat? It wasn't an exciting read.
General - Manuk
"This is Manuk, where the Sapha, descendants of Hwergelmir live."
Speaking of which, the roots connecting Umbala to Niff is named .
This is a dialogue from one of the Manuk NPCs from the previous update. I think these are worker NPCs? Some of them is called "Phiom" while others are called "Piom". They also refer to themselves as "Safas", when 13.3 dialogues refer to themselves as "Sapha".
That's it for now, I'll post more when I get through the quests.
Edited by Miyuki, 27 June 2011 - 05:51 PM.