Currently in the formatting you have multiple different ways of referring to the (nouns?) Player, User and so on and the Homunculus gets both short hand and full spelling and quite randomly gets capitalization and lower case, also the Homunculus S sometimes has a full stop after it and othertimes does not, not even at the end of a sentence, but as part of a abbreviation I think
also sometimes there is terminology that I do not beleive people really use and so may not understand what you are talking about, Anti-mob skill sounds fine, but I think AoE skills is probably the more used expression.
you can hopefully use CTRL-F to find most of these lines.
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Full support for Homunculus S systemFull support for the Homunculus S systemmakes it a sentence
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Offensive skills for homun and homun S, including debuffsOffensive skills for Homunculus,Homunculus S and Mercenaries including Debuffsremoved intermittent shorthand. not sure if you really need to state Homunculus S in there, it certainly isn't stated anywhere else and looks a little out of place if you ask me, and its not like you are competing with anyone else with your AI where you need to say "mine has it and other AI do not" or anything like that
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Anti-mob skills depending on number of targets (configurable)AoE skills that can be activated based on Mob sizemore circulated terminology.
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Self-buff skills – will not try to recast buffs incorrectly after teleport
Provoke / Painkiller / Sacrifice on ownerBuff skills like Provoke, Painkiller, Sacrifice on OwnerIntelligent skill re-usage - Will never re-cast a Buff early after having teleported or changed screen.just wasn't feeling either sentence.
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Healing skills, on owner and self (for chaotic blessings)Healing skills, on Owner and Homunculus (Vanilmirth, Eira)need the facts checked at the end, but I liked this better as chaotic blessings might not be too meaningful for someone perhaps reading the documentation before deciding to make a Alchemist based class.
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Castling – to get monsters off owner, or even to move around the mapSupportive skills like Amistr's Castling and Lif's Urgent EscapeI think routewalking with castling deserves its own section really as you can (could?) use routes to follow your Mercenary too, obviously as that isn't a skill though it wouldn't get into the 'Automatically use skills' section
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Mercenary and Homun automatically friended if both out at onceMercenary and Homunculus automatically work together when used togetherremoved shorthand, rest of the sentence can go either way----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Cross and Circle motions when friending, like MirAIWhen adding players performs a circle motion and when removing players a cross motion should circle and cross be capitolized? I have no idea, but I do think that its safe to remove reference to a (dead?) other AI, at worst people might go and check it out and make topics about MirAI and why doesn't this and that work about it, bleh. My sentence seems like it doesn't clarify, but as its under the sub heading it makes sense in context, I didn't want to make the sentence any longer as I thought it might have trouble fiting in with the visual formatting you have with the bullet points centered, but if you shift that all to the left a little a larget sentence would fit. also It didn't seem like a sentence so i fleshed it out a little
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Merc/homun autofriending not broken with multiple accountsMercenary and Homunculus automatical friending across unlimited AccountsI don't think a feature sentence should start with describing how something isn't broken, I just don't feel that something positive should be described as "not negative!" like that, and honestly, your AI isn't really competeing with anyone per se. I don't think it needs to be worded like "mine isn't broken LIKE THAT OTHER GUYS!" if you understand what I mean. As an account is a object I added a capitol letter
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Buff timers not confused by using multiple accountsFully Tracks timers across all Accountsagain I think this sentence flys in as a negative, and is a little redundant because if it didn't it would just be a bug, rather than it being a feature, as I didn't want to sound like I was being mean I wrote a sentence how I would have wrote it if I did decide to still include it.----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Framework for supporting different configurations for different accounts.Framework for supporting different configurations for different AccountsI just added a capitol letter to accounts
and took away the full stop, this is the
only sentence / bullter point thingy here that has a full stop, they either all need it (which I didn't do) or none of them should have it like I did in my version of the sentence.
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Idle walk – have your merc or homun roam around you when there’s nothing else for it to do.Idle funcionality – have your Mercenary and/or Homunculus pattern orbit you to atract new mobs.
another negative sounding one in my opinion, the way you describe it makes it sound a little useless, when it was always designed (in that other AI
) to do something with a use
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Sniping – homunculus can use attack skills on a different monster than it’s currently fighting, to
avoid wasting sp on a monster that’s already half dead, or to aggro monsters.Sniping – Homunculus and Mercenaries* can use attack skills on a different Mob to the one that it’s currently fighting, to either avoid wasting SP on a Mob that’s already half dead, or to aggro new Mobs.Whilst I like monster I don't ever see anyone using it as a term, people ( Imo ) use mob for both a group of monsters or a single monster, still I capitolized Homunculus and expanded some sentences that seemed a little like shorthand and Mercenary's can also use Sniping and really the feature ought to belong to them too if you are going to feature it
I added the asterisk as i'm sure the Merc needs the Homunculus to 'see' the monster for it for this to work and you'll want to mention that somewhere of course. dropped the word 'or' as both of them can do it simultaniously rather than excusively
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Tanking – have the merc or homun tank for you or another player, or to mob for its own AoE.Tanking – have the Mercenary and Homunculus tank for you, itself or another player. Useful to AoE.added capitols, removed shorthand, made the sentence a little less clunky (imo)
added full stop, dropped the word 'or' as both of them can do it simultaniously rather than excusively
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Dance Attack – homunculi (but not mercenaries) can attack slightly faster by “dancing”Dance Attack – Homunculi (but not Mercenaries) can attack significantly faster by moving whilst attacking at the cost of SP regeneration.This sentence attempts to describe dancing by likening it to....dancing!
and I felt that it under sold the function, it can be one heck of alot of a diffrence, also contains a neat warning that might stop a new thread or two on the forums about SP usage / recovery. added full stop
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Kiting – merc or homun can run away from attacking monstersKiting – Mercenary and Homunculus can run away from attacking Mobs with adjustable parameters.
Capitols, Shorthand, Full stop, removed word Monsters, dropped the word 'or' as both of them can do it simultaniously rather than excusively
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Rescue – merc or homun can drop current targets to defend you or friendsRescue – Mercenary and Homunculus can drop current targets to defend You, Friends or Itself.
Capitols (not sure on the ones for you friend and itself) , Shorthand, Full stop, dropped the word 'or' as both of them can do it simultaniously rather than excusively
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Optional auto-shutdown feature (homun only) to exit client if DB’ed monsters show up.Optional auto-shutdown feature (Homunculus only) can be configured to exit Ragnarok Online automatically if Dead Branch or Bloody Branch Mob appears.I need to learn where this option is, Bee killed me in OD2 while I was writing this for you Well thats page one, I was really looking for actual errors instead of Grammer-like stuff, but basically I found none, page one is error free! page two coming after I've been to sleep and actually played a little more instead of type type typing!
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Edit: added the separator lines, hope they don't look like crap on a phone or anything, as I don't know how to do the proper editing separator lines D:
Edited by deanoreadman3, 10 April 2013 - 06:09 PM.